[kinder clean]

I'm getting the van graphics re done this week ( should have been done on Friday, don't ask )

Anyway, every time I look at the wording I change my mind again. 

What do you think of the following bullet points for the rear of the van :

Rapid Drying Times

Non Franchise Family Business

Premium Child & Pet Friendly Products

Satisfaction Guaranteed

No Shrinkage Guaranteed ( I read somewhere never use the word "No" but I can't think of another way of wording it )

20 times more powerful than the old fashioned truck mount cleaners ! ( Kidding !!! calm down !! calm down  I know its only 19 really )

Any good suggestions welcome.

Thanks

Paul

[derek west]

1) company name

2) carpet and upholstery cleaners with professional or speacialist next to it.

3) a good selling point, mine is rapid drying times

4) and possibly domestic and commercial.

5) a logo to accompany your name unless your name is your logo.

anymore than that is a waste of time in my eyes

less is more.

derek

[Steve Barnett (Carpet Care Plus)]

I agree with Derek


Steve

PS: definately would not put "no shrinkage guaranteed."

[gwrightson]

Paul,

I always feel that the wording ," no shrinkage "  can sow a seed of doubt in some peoples minds, imho it is a negative, why do you need to stress this point you are trying to make?

Got to agree, keep it simple and to the point , I made the mistake of cramming info on mine , and in hinesight would not have done it, well next van will be different.
Its good to see that  your considering the options and not going for the first thing .

Geoff

[garyfindlay]

Eco Friendly products? Get straight to the point. A customer only sees it briefly at lights etc so has to know exactly what you do in a short space of time.

[Joe H]

I got a client and when I asked her why did she choose me she said "you were the only one that said no shrinkage - I have had shrinkage in the past".

[Mike Halliday]

I'm getting mine designed at the moment all it will have is.....

 name,
professional carpet & upholstery cleaning
Tel No

I wanted to keep it simple

mike

[Mike Halliday]

ooooh I forgot.

 its also got a giraffe, an elephant a monkey a crocodile and a zebra

[gwrightson]

so nothing new  another picture of you on the van

geoff

[derek west]

ooooh I forgot.

 its also got a giraffe, an elephant a monkey a crocodile and a zebra

"animal friendly cleaning solutions"

good thinking mike

derek

[clinton]

Paul

Got to agree  with the guys above and make it simple to read..

Got 2 jobs from my new van already any more and its just a waste.

[The Great One]

Hi

Get a picture of Jesus with the wording:

'Carpet Cleaning Miracles Performed' 

Regards

Martin

[sherco]

Hi

Get a picture of Jesus with the wording:

'Carpet Cleaning Miracles Performed' 

Regards

Martin
[/quote
And also get the Christian fish logo on there some where.

[Jim Gibbard]

Paul

Got to agree  with the guys above and make it simple to read..

Got 2 jobs from my new van already any more and its just a waste.

Clinton,
Van looks great, does what is say's on the van !!!
Don't like the superhero character though.  The rest is good, looks bright, modern & easy on the eye.


Jim

[Shaun_Ashmore]

But Clinton is a super hero!

He's our very own Mr.Muscle

Shaun

[Jim Gibbard]

I'm getting the van graphics re done this week ( should have been done on Friday, don't ask )

Anyway, every time I look at the wording I change my mind again. 

What do you think of the following bullet points for the rear of the van :

Rapid Drying Times

Non Franchise Family Business

Premium Child & Pet Friendly Products

Satisfaction Guaranteed

No Shrinkage Guaranteed ( I read somewhere never use the word "No" but I can't think of another way of wording it )

20 times more powerful than the old fashioned truck mount cleaners ! ( Kidding !!! calm down !! calm down  I know its only 19 really )

Any good suggestions welcome.

Thanks

Paul

Paul,
.
Keep it simple & to the point, you need to win customers, not a writing competion.  Like Derek Say's, "Less is More"
Simples


Clinton, 

Perhaps a caricature of you would be more personal.  You could be that superhero!!

Jim

[clinton]

Jim

Shaun is right it me

[Mike Halliday]

ooooh I forgot.

 its also got a giraffe, an elephant a monkey a crocodile and a zebra

I was not joking this is it they still need to put in the elephant & crocodile

[derek west]

like the animals but the picture of you on the back spoils it
derek

[Mike Halliday]

I'm taking that off, its the only bit I don't like, I knew I'd get that comment

but this is the first proof the have sent me, I emailed them and told them to be more adventurous, more animals, a spitfire flying in the sky and a space ship.